Tyler: Huh where are they? (Finds something belonged to Chase) here goes nothing (sniffs it and follows the Trail) Huh? (Sees them fighting) hey let go of my I mean their friend (gets a scary voice) or else!
Flame: NOT SO FAST! (I dodged the fireball) NORMALITY NEEDLE RAFF! *A needle with yellow liquid comes out, and I do a Jackie Chan, flipping over to "Flarepup" And injecting him with the Fluid, which neutralizes whatever the heck it this those guys did. Wow this is long* Flame is in the game!
Flame: NOT HAPPENING DIRTBAG! *Pulls a random lever that shuts all the power off, then in the darkness, injects Marshall with a multicolored liquid* I hope that worked...
Tyler: (eyes glow red) it better or I'll get angry and you don't wanna see a lichit (my made up creature it's a dog or wolf with powers of well everything) when it's angry
Tyler: Well whenever I try to talk to you guys you're always too busy or on some mission it's nice to have a real friend (hits him playfully on the shoulder)
Awww.. now I think about it we've been really mean! We're sorry. Would you like to come back to the lookout with us and let Flame treat this? Then we can have a sleepover and play!
Marshallpp wrote: Awww.. now I think about it we've been really mean! We're sorry. Would you like to come back to the lookout with us and let Flame treat this? Then we can have a sleepover and play!
Marshallpp wrote: Awww.. now I think about it we've been really mean! We're sorry. Would you like to come back to the lookout with us and let Flame treat this? Then we can have a sleepover and play!
Me not Chase: I cant go thru with this i feel sad and i know that you tried but i just feel terrible :'( :'( and of what you said in chats of my stories and i understand but it really hurt i 'll just not come :(
Chaseisonthecase wrote: Me not Chase: I cant go thru with this i feel sad and i know that you tried but i just feel terrible :'( :'( and of what you said in chats of my stories and i understand but it really hurt i 'll just not come :(
CHASE! DON'T LEAVE! I'm sorry I said those things, I didn't mean to hurt your feelings, I was just trying to etell you that it neded fixing, not drive you away! Please don't leave!
Chaseisonthecase, I take back everything I said. Skyewatcher made the story, not you. So I'm sorry I hurt your felins, just please don't leave! I'llbesolonelywithoutyouandsowillMarshall! Pleasedon'tleaveChaseisonthecase! Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaase!
Well it started when Flame chat with me then started talking about how bad was it grammer trash and more i understand that Flame has a condition but continued that i should delete Chase's incident and more that hurt a bit but what hurted me the most was when i read this comment
I have to say it. This isn't very good. The grammer is like it was done by an 8-year old, the story itself is too confusing, not to mention the lack of puncuation! This needs MAJOR editing, and maybe a complete redo!
Things I hated about this story:
1. Puncuation is non-existant
2. Horrible grammer
3. Story is too confusing.
4. Story can't hold my interest.
5. The PAW Patrol is somewhat OOC. (Out Of Character)
6. Not much backstory to the OC pup.
I'm sorry if this sounds like a rant about eerything bad, but I just don't think this story can go anywhere without a complete redoing.
Please don't block me! I thought he created the story, but Skyewatcher did. I didn't mean to hurt his feelings, so please don't block me! Please don't! I was just upset! I promise I'll delete thecomment! Pleasedon'tblockmeIdon'twannabeblockedthiswikimeanssomuchtomeIhopeyoucanfinditinyourheartotforgivemepleasedon'tblockmeMarshall!
FlamingPup wrote: Please don't block me! I thought he created the story, but Skyewatcher did. I didn't mean to hurt his feelings, so please don't block me! Please don't! I was just upset! I promise I'll delete the comment! Please don't block me I don't wanna be blocked this wiki means so much to me I hope you can find it in your heart to forgive me please don't block me Marshall!
FlamingPup: I'm not gonna block you! I'm glad you apologized to Chase and we all know you have a condition so we know you don't REALLY mean it like that.
Chaseisonthecase: You should not let him get you down. I'm happy we're all friends again and I know you was sad but please don't do that again. It scared me and upset me enough when Flame did it!
Marshall! I forgive you! Please don't leave the wiki because of my ignorance! I promise I'll never get mad at you again! I promise on my Pup-Pack! And my Pup-tag! PLEASE DON'T LEAVE!
That's ok! I really want to help on this wiki and I just like to help a few new articles by adding categories! Btw, I am the representative of MARSHALL.